Mage's Blood

I've read a lot of fiction of varying qualities, and generally so long as it's fun or interesting in some way I'll overlook a lot of flaws. Sadly sometimes a work has a flaw that keeps popping up in your face and waving its arms around, shouting "Hey, remember me? Don't you find me annoying? Yoooooohooooo! Over here!". Mage's Blood had one of those, and despite feeling that there was something there to appreciate in the story I couldn't get past the clunky world building.

Mage's Blood is technically a secondary world fantasy - set in a world that's not our own, rather than our own world with some fantastical element added. Technically. But it's full of things like these:

"Have you seen Ramon?"
"Nope. I imagine the Silacian sneak-thief is probably running his village familioso by now."

I guess Silacian == Sicilian where the mafia come from, get it, get it, get it?? We are hit over the head with this several times, and Ramon even sprinkles Italian words & phrases through his speech.

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